Echoes. My first original song.

I finally finished my first full song and wanted to share it with you all. It’s in D minor, and I uploaded it as an unlisted YouTube link. I made a couple of mistakes in the second half, but I left them in because they’re part of the moment.

My goal with this track was to make the guitar express everything I was feeling while writing it. It’s raw and emotional, but it’s real. After the time I’ve spent learning music on the site, I’m proud I pushed myself to finish something.

I’m still learning and still growing, but this is the first time I’ve turned what I’m feeling into music. I added a copyright statement to try and protect my music. Thanks for checking it out.

Any discussion on the feel and approach is appreciated.

Echoes, My First Song

Nice job! Things really start to cook with that riff around 1:15. Very cool riff!

Bill

Thanks, Bill. I appreciate it, man. I’m glad that riff landed for you. If you have any thoughts on the overall sound or feel, I’m open to it. I know this style isn’t everyone’s thing, so likes or dislikes won’t offend me. I’m still going to chase my own sound.

For this track, I used tritones, a flat 5, a few mode changes, a cliché descent, some rests, and a minor chord bend at the end from the 5th to the minor 6th. Even with the mistakes in the second half, I was hoping it still came across mostly clean in one take. 

I also hope that lick leading into the pre-chorus was cool. I was mainly trying to stick with D minor and add the flat 5 while making my own sound and incorporating my blues and music theory lessons. 

I confidently don't want to be playing covers all the time. I really want to become my own musician. Any thoughts on the approach or vibe are welcome.

It’s pretty hard for me to critique when I can’t write music myself. This is not from not understanding music theory, I do. It’s just that I would never in 1 million years come up with the riff for Jumpin jack flash if you know what I mean. So…

The song has a lot going on, but if you’re not throwing all that shit at the wall, how would you know what sticks is the only thing I can advise. So throw as much as you possibly can and overtime you’ll work out how you want your songs to be structured. What stays and what goes.

And I agree with you, the music has to be your own, regardless of whether or not other people like it. I write lyrics all the time, which are really just short stories about something that is either happening in my life or I see it happening in someone else’s life and I want to write about it. And like you, my lyrics are actually very important to me and I take them seriously. So when I am criticized as dark and moody, well, I guess that’s just how I am as a person and that’s going to come out in my lyrics and that won’t change. And I read from your posting it’s pretty much going to be the same for you. You’re gonna find the music that you want to play for your own ears. 

Keep writing!

Thanks, dude. That actually does say a lot. I threw everything at it and pulled a lot back. That main riff started as a motif, and I built it up from there. Plus, about 50 other ideas I removed and changed. I didn't even have the skill set to play it when I first wrote it! I had to practice it everyday for about two weeks and I still aint got it perfect. I'll keep writing. Thanks, bud.

Nice work finishing your first song—the tritones and flat 5 give it a distinctive tension that fits the emotional feel you were going for.

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