Soap Box

Howdy folks. I actually made up this riff quite sometime ago. Finally found some application for it with these lyrics. Just seemed to jive well. This tune is called Soap Box due to the fact that I'm constantly bitching about things that I'm ultimately in control and have no good reason to be bitching about them. Theres really much more to it, but its tedious details that none of you would understand or care about, so just listen to the damn song!!!!....sorry.

Anyways, heres the link: Soap Box

This song gave me a little trouble on vocal range factor, because my vocal range is pretty small. Kind of stuck between octaves. But I tried. And I don't think it sounds too bad.

Bass was recorded with my Ibanez RG with my whammy pedal set 1 octave down. Thought it gave it a decent bass tone, so thats what I did.

Enjoy. Feedback and constructive criticism greatly appreciated.

EDIT*** I actually posted this song in the wee hours of this morn, but I realized it sounded too empty and needed more work. So I deleted and did some fixin up...just in case anyone saw that thread.

It grooves soo sweetly.

You gotta turn up the vocals though. They're hard to hear.

Liking it though. :cool:

Originally Posted by: ericthecableguyIt grooves soo sweetly.

You gotta turn up the vocals though. They're hard to hear.

Liking it though. :cool:

I'll do that and reupload it. Thanks for listening.

Anything for you. :cool:

Eric's right - you've got the groove! :cool: Really good lyrical concept as well, and you've got quite a good singing style.

Updated. :)

I enjoyed this. Keep 'em coming. :)

Groovy tune mate!

I hear a Satch influence in the chords :D

I like the idea you did with the whammy peadl for bass...

Keep it up!

I like it!!! It's my style of music. You have a nice grove going and some real simple but effective riffs. Now for something scary. Try taking some of the effect off your voice next time and see how you sound. The effect makes it a little hard to make out the lyrics and I think your voice is good enough you don't need so much effect.

Keep them comin.... :cool:

Originally Posted by: Bar Chord NickI like it!!! It's my style of music. You have a nice grove going and some real simple but effective riffs. Now for something scary. Try taking some of the effect off your voice next time and see how you sound. The effect makes it a little hard to make out the lyrics and I think your voice is good enough you don't need so much effect.

Keep them comin.... :cool:

Yeah, I could probably do without the chorus on the vocals. I thought it sounded kind of cool, but I was also struggling to make out what I said...and I know what I said. I did kind of slur things up a bit, but I'm sure the chorus doesn't aid in that much.

Thanks for listening guys. Thoughts appreciated.

what effect did you use on the vocals? thats sweet.

I used a certain chorus type on cool edit pro, can't recall off hand which it is. I also used chamber reverb and then added some delay. I'm not actually sure how much that would effect the understandibility (if thats a word) of the lyrics either. I think I just slurred the words enough and speak lazy enough for it to be hard to understand. But I might take it off and repost it and see if its any more understandable.

This is a really good song, but I have to agree that the vocals could do without the effects. I think it takes more away from the song than it gives to it when you can't understand any of the words. But seriously, you've got a lot of talent. Looking forward to the next one.

What do you guys thinks needs to be removed? I'm at least gonna leave the reverb. Perhaps the chorus and delay? Or just the chorus?

Edit: Just tried to remove it but can't for a few reasons out of my control now, so I may have to rerecord it sometime.

Here are the lyrics in case anyone was interested in what I was saying. They're a little different than this because I changed words as I got to certain parts to make them flow better.

Stomach occassionally grumbles
Joins the pitty party for me
My incoherent mumbles
Bout the status of my poverty

Unemployed and angry
With life and the fact that it sucks
Lookin for handouts of money
Always in need a few more bucks

Step up on the soap box
Preach about my dignity
Blamin everyone but myself
Deny the reality
Won't work here, can't do that
Too good to be a normal guy
Holding on to this "dignity"
Wishing everyone would comply

Why do they hesitate
To answer to my every demand
Been a slacker since I was born
Now they don't wanna hold my hand

Step up on the soap box
Preach about my dignity
Blamin everyone but myself
Deny the reality
Won't work here, can't do that
Too good to be a normal guy
Holding on to this "dignity"
Without the thought to even try

the vocal effect was my favorite part!
hahaha