Jolly also writes a sonnet

On the Holistic Divinity of Fixed Form

Alternate Title: A Cross Stick.
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Every marching iamb, lined in rows—
Looking for his “-ic” and matching rhyme—
Enters into packing which, when closed,
Glows with bright, transcendent light, confined.

All together found that were once lost,
Now within a blessed and holy form,
Counted, numbered, shined, and polished—glossed,
Every marching metric must conform.

In the end they come to paradise.
Soft and warm the end their marches reach.
All ascend, and so their souls now rise.
Lifted, they are dropped; they cry and screech.

Ill befalls—they fall, and so they must.
Essence trades them genocide for trust.

Hahahahahahahaha. Sonnet. You hate sonnets.

The only thing I'm going to say is that "rhyme" doesn't rhyme with "light," no matter how hard you want it to. I only bring that up because I know you'd never let me get away with that kinda crap if I was the one who wrote the sonnet. :)

I like the last line, though. Very interesting.

Bump, hehe.

Originally Posted by: Jolly McJollysonGlows with clear and bright transcendent light.

I don't like that line. And I don't you think you do either. :)

Well you made your point anyway. It's kind of a weird coincidence that I read "An Enigma" (or is it just "Enigma"?) by Egar Allan Poe today.

Question though, what's with all the different poems n' junk of late? Are you challenging yourself to write something in every fixed form there is?

Originally Posted by: acapellaI don't like that line. And I don't you think you do either. :)

Well you made your point anyway. It's kind of a weird coincidence that I read "An Enigma" (or is it just "Enigma"?) by Egar Allan Poe today.

Question though, what's with all the different poems n' junk of late? Are you challenging yourself to write something in every fixed form there is?

I edited the poem, and changed that line.

I'm challenging myself with fixity, yes, but the big challenge of this poem is the hidden "ending" line on the left side:
"Elegance is a lie." Dunno if anyone noticed that, it's an acrostic sonnet.

acrostic

Originally Posted by: z0s0_jpacrostic

??? :confused:

Sorry I haven't had a chance to comment on your foray into poetry Jolly. I am hesitant to say much because I really know nothing, absolutely nothing, about poetry in any of it's forms.

I treat poetry the same way I treat art. I don't know what is technically good or bad but I know what appeals to me and what I like.

I like what you've done. It does what good writing is supposed to do. Create an emotional response in a person and your work does just that. **Applause, applause....**

Again, I am mightly impressed by your talent. :)

Originally Posted by: hunter60Sorry I haven't had a chance to comment on your foray into poetry Jolly. I am hesitant to say much because I really know nothing, absolutely nothing, about poetry in any of it's forms.

I treat poetry the same way I treat art. I don't know what is technically good or bad but I know what appeals to me and what I like.

I like what you've done. It does what good writing is supposed to do. Create an emotional response in a person and your work does just that. **Applause, applause....**

Again, I am mightly impressed by your talent. :)

Haha, I've been wondering where you were!

To be honest, I posted this sonnet with you in mind; I thought you might get a kick out of the "Elegance is a lie" down the left side.

Oh man, I am a total boob. Missed the anacrostic. Of course, I went back and looked and it was right there. If it had been a snake, it would have bit me right in the snout! :)

Again, nicely done.

Originally Posted by: hunter60Oh man, I am a total boob. Missed the anacrostic. Of course, I went back and looked and it was right there. If it had been a snake, it would have bit me right in the snout! :)

Again, nicely done.

Don't feel bad, no one's seen it. I thought titling it "A Cross Stick" would help, but still zero for, like, 20 on people catching that...

Dude, I totally missed that! Don't I look the fool. :o

Originally Posted by: earthman buckHahahahahahahaha. Sonnet. You hate sonnets.

By the way... How'd you know I hate sonnets?

You told me a while back on MSN.