Its a song ive been working on..

every time i see your face
my heart is reminded of memories
oh yea
every time i hear your voice
my mind wanders to days of the past
hmnnnn...
you hurt my heart
so many times
two years, worth nothing

i still wonder why to this day
why i stayed with you
why i still believed in you
and how i thought you could ever change

so many times
i look back now
and wonder why
i feel this way
i miss the days
the days you would hold me
and nothing in the world could go wrong

the feelings i felt..

how i wanted you
i wanted you to hold me
feel your breath along my skin
i wanted you to see
see my face.. see me cry
what you did to me

but thats all i got so far and im trying to figure out a strict rhythem to put it to because for some reason it always changes when i sing it..
but its about a x boyfriend who definently did me wrong..
tell me what you think and any criticisim is welcomed

Candix

Hmm... well I'll just give you advice on one stanza/verse since i'm at work and yeah, don't have enough time.

"every time i see your face"

This is too cliche, you've probably heard it in another song (not to say you're copying it). You could think of some clever way to reword it though.

"every time i hear your voice"

Okay switching senses can be cool, but using it in this type of way is done really often. You could use the sense switch, and as I said about that last line reword it.

"my heart is reminded of memories"

Thats a throw away line, unless once again you want to reword it.

"my mind wanders to days of the past
"

Way to switch from heart to mind, kind of going with your sense switching theme thingy. Your use of wanders is cliche, but you could keep it (because it isn't too bad).

And that's all I have time for. I'm picky with lyrics, so don't let me discourage you. It might sound good with the music.