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kingdavid
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kingdavid
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05/19/2004 12:51 pm
I submitted an entry to a reality TV show that will be coming up in South Africa(www.projectfame.co.za),and amongst other things,they required one to write a verse with the word "imagine".John Lennon's "Imagine" is the relevance,in case you're wondering.
This is what I wrote.And I want to hear what you guys think.And you can diss me if you want(this is guitartricks,where the first ammendment was in vented).The first is the one about freedom of speech,right?
Here goes:
The demons lord and roam the island
Bridges burnt by the princes of light
The totem pole bows to the wind
As the sands dance with the sea
The baby kicks,the breast is bitter
The baby wails,the milk is sour,
And as they come to take her away
She imagines it was all in vain.

I wrote part of this in about an hour(upto the milk being sour),and finished it the next day.
If you want my "interpretation",let me know.