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noticingthemistake
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noticingthemistake
Crime Fighter
Joined: 08/04/02
Posts: 1,518
07/25/2003 3:01 am
Yeah cool lyrics. In my opinion they need some work, not so much in the lyric (since that's your thing) but the structuring. A good tip since your looking for catchy but meaningful lyrics is to try writing the chorus foremost, then let the verses reflect on the what the chorus is about. A chorus itself should be something that is catchy and that everyone can relate to, and best sing-a-long to. A good idea is to take a prevalent social phrase and say it in the chorus. Like this, "when it's all said and done, I'm not the only one." Now everyone has heard someone say, "when it's all said and done" at some point in there life. Then "I'm not the only one" reflects the meaning of the song. The song is about my high school years where I put up with a lot of B.S. but in the end I still had friends and everything worked out good. I think a lot of people can relate to that. Well anyways there's my tip for ya. Best of luck to you.
"My whole life is a dark room...ONE BIG DARK ROOM" - a.f.i.