Original demo (why so many covers in here...lol)


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05/06/2016 1:16 am
I recently started writing songs, and lots of ideas of different genres have coem to me. Here's a link to the one that's closest to finished.

Please critique the lyrics, playing, etc. Suggestions for improvement are welcome.

I know i can't sing, so comments about that are wasted...lol...if I'm to go anywhere with this music thing, I'll need to get a vocalist. that's life.

https://soundcloud.com/user-781639532/song1allmylife

I'm not fishing for compliments...be real.

Thanks!
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05/06/2016 4:46 pm
Wow, you wrote this?! It's really good!

I don't think you have a bad singing voice at all, you sing better than I do haha. I'm really digging the rhythm. Did you use a beat maker for the intro?
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05/06/2016 8:15 pm
the drumbeat is an old casio keybord set to "60's rock" rhythm, and me fingerpicking my Martin. That's all tht's in the song.

I recorded it on the built in laptop mic using windows voice recorder....high tech stuff......

Yes, I wrote it.

Thanks for listening.
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05/08/2016 5:22 am
Wow, this song is really cool. I do like your voice too. I like how the verse stays low and then the chorus has a melody peak in there. The beat goes super well with the cool, upbeat guitar part. Well done, I'm excited to hear the bridge!
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05/13/2016 6:21 pm
Ok guys, thanks again for all the suggestions........here's the latest version

I used a better mic and an akai "eieio" interface. I added a verse and an empty (just rhythm) insturmental break.

It's the same keyboard and guitar and all, just better recording equipment. It's still pretty raw.

I realize that the vocals and guitar are still a little sloppy, byt what do you guys think of the format and lyrics, etc?

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05/17/2016 5:01 pm
I think it's great actually, I don't see how anything is sloppy!

The instrumental break was my favorite haha. Very well done.
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