Need some constructive criticism

I'd liked it alot, i can tell you put alot of feeling in it,we are always our own worse critics and it took guts to post i don't think i'd ever be brave enough to do it myself,sounded great bud hope to hear more from you :D

Originally Posted by: greg65I'd liked it alot, i can tell you put alot of feeling in it,we are always our own worse critics and it took guts to post i don't think i'd ever be brave enough to do it myself,sounded great bud hope to hear more from you :D

Thanks alot Greg, it's a little nerve racking posting when you didn't spend alot of time on the recording or song.
I need recording gear now since I had to get rid of the last.
You should try and post something, the feedback so far is always positive and constructive.
Thanks again,
Ron

[QUOTE=waylar]Thanks alot Greg, it's a little nerve racking posting when you didn't spend alot of time on the recording or song.
I need recording gear now since I had to get rid of the last.
You should try and post something, the feedback so far is always positive and constructive.
Thanks again,
Ron[/QUOTE

Man you've got the chops! :cool:

From my perspective, you could get more mileage from this tune if you simplify things. I could make three songs out the material you put together. Overall, the work is predictable . . . not something most musicians really want.

While endless leads are amazing feats on their own, try inserting a few rhythmic bursts to add some power to your passages. I say this because it will help keep an average listener's attention to your performance. Also, open up the dynamic range more; to increase the emotional flow for the listener.

Don't take this too hard, I can dish out the criticism; but would struggle to keep up with you.

Keep going.

Gary O.

Originally Posted by: outwatglMan you've got the chops! :cool:

From my perspective, you could get more mileage from this tune if you simplify things. I could make three songs out the material you put together. Overall, the work is predictable . . . not something most musicians really want.

While endless leads are amazing feats on their own, try inserting a few rhythmic bursts to add some power to your passages. I say this because it will help keep an average listener's attention to your performance. Also, open up the dynamic range more; to increase the emotional flow for the listener.

Don't take this too hard, I can dish out the criticism; but would struggle to keep up with you.

Keep going.

Gary O.

Thank you, I asked for constructive criticism and you gave it to me. I appreciate your input outwatgl. Could you say a bit more about rhythmic bursts and opening up the dynamic range? This is all very new to me.

I wanted to gauge my playing with this recording that came before I joined GT or any formal training accept a High School class years ago. Just years of playing but not knowing anything about song writing or anything else musically for that matter, learning a lot here.

Thanks again :)
waylar

How can I have 1,420 listens today, who are you people? unexpected and thanks. I'm working on a revised version.

Constructively, I just think the kick drum has too much attack, so roll off the high and volume a bit and bring dat screaming guitar closer please.

Originally Posted by: waylarCan you give me some feedback on my guitar playing, thanks everyone. Jeeze I hope I got this right this time, hahaha....

Wow sounds real good, I am not in your league, but It is very good...