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dov_e_lo
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dov_e_lo
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03/25/2002 4:50 pm
i found a really good rhythme for my song and i think the lyrics work out perfectly....
the only part i don't have is the second verse because it is a lot shorter than the other two...
my lyrics rhyme WAY TOOO MUCH...i'll fix that.

some other poeple told me i should make metaphors so i could show what i mean and not just write it..but i can't seem to change my lyrics because they rhyme all the time...(if you understand what i mean)what should i do??

dov.