Flawed not perfect... Good yes or no? Critique please


guitarboy313
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guitarboy313
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07/31/2010 7:33 am
http://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1344886


I put it on UG so check it out, tell me what you guys think.
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Rescued1
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08/11/2010 10:39 pm
Very dark indeed. and that's ok. Get your hands on a thesourus. It's like a dictionary but will give you other words with same or similar meaning. It may help for some of those cumbersome spots in l
the lyric

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caponi14
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caponi14
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09/03/2010 12:35 pm
Hello,

The lyrics are very dark yes. Personally i would have put some ryhmes in there. But if it's good for you, it's good for you.

Keep up the good work!
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