prophets for profit

hi

what do you think of this one earthman buck, opinions are appreciated

Prophets for profit

Calling the maker, the creator of life
Are you a fakir placed conveniently in our minds?
From birth to an age enraged by non-consensual belief
Put upon, carried on, feelings gone AWOL released,
And it brought them too their knees but the cause was faith in themselves had ceased,
It takes a long time living life connecting your soul to your minds eye
It’s a rough ride slip outside reality shows you the other side,

Oh god what have you done, your special sons have split the world in two
Its true there’s more of you
Prophets for profit its gains for capital,
Oh lord it’s a preachers dream, contribution schemes where fat cats get the cream
It seems there are more regimes
Prophets for profit its gains for capital,

Born as a saviour the salvation of men
Amazing revelations or a legend put to paper by pen
Trusting is a faith, a belief in a truth without question
Puppy eyes, visualise genocide happening without redemption
And it brought you to their knees but the cause was faith in yourself had ceased,
It takes a long time living life connecting your soul to your minds eye
It’s a rough ride slip outside reality shows you the other side,

Then they pray you see the light
Their mumbles a code a web of lies
Their intent to hypnotise
Conform or you’ll be criticised

Oh god what have you done your special sons have split the world in two
Its true there’s more of you
Prophets for profit its gains for capital
Oh lord it’s a preachers dream, contribution schemes where fat cats get the cream
It seems there are more regimes
Prophets for profit its gains for capital
Their on a crusade to brainwash their comrades
No matter what the mass say
Make your own mind up

First of all, sorry it took me so long.....I hardly ever check out the songwriting section because it's kind of slow in terms of new stuff.

It has its moments, for sure. "Oh god what have you done, your special sons have split the world in two," "contribution schemes where fat cats get the cream," "Puppy eyes, visualise genocide happening without redemption"....those are all cool lines. Some of it comes across as too literal somehow, in my opinion.

But then, I find it hard to read lyrics that aren't in a super-tight rhythm. I'd love to hear this, if you have means of recording. You might want to PM me if you do, though...I don't check the Listening Post very often either. :p