can i get some feedback?

MIXED UP

Everything is wrong
Then everything is right
Never know what you’ll get in
This craze called life

You hate everything
Then everything is loved
It’s all mixed up
And I’ve had enough

I wish everything would straighten out
So I could clear my head
I never saw it coming
So many tears unshed

It all seemed alive
But it was all dead
Many things I never knew
Are now being said

I wish everything would straighten out
So I could clear my head
I never saw it coming
So many tears unshed

I wish everything would straighten out
So I could clear my head
I never saw it coming
So many tears unshed

When things first start
You pretend to be so brave
As things go on
Fear will make you its slave

I wish everything would straighten out
So I could clear my head
I never saw it coming
So many tears unshed

I wish everything would straighten out
So I could clear my head


how i have it in my head is that the verse 1 and 3 are sang and 2 and 4 are screamed
and on the chorus (i wish everything would ....) the first part of each line is sang and the last 3 sylables are screamed

there's no actual context tho imo...also perhaps you should consider cutting down on the repetitive part of the lyrics...but i guess it also depends on your genre of music and how you're gonna deliver it...if u like it and u think it suits go for it buddy!

Just my opinion, but it's really hard to judge lyrics without music to back them up.
They sound well written enough... but the whole tone of the sound comes from how they're sang to the music.

I honestly can't give an opinion on these lyrics because there's no way to judge how they relate to real life.
Is it a happy song, a sad song, reflective.... etc.....

i belive they are great lyrics. but you need to tell is it a good happy song, or a metal song, what is it you know? like the guy said it is hard to judge a song without insturments or anyhtin backin it up. But keep up the good writing, i may tell my friends about it :)

i described how it gos at the end of the song

like people said before it is hard to judge with out the music you cant realy tell if its a happy sad or what it is it is well written :cool: