no need to apologize. negative input is always better (more helpful) than positive, although positive is nice to hear ;)

I guess your right though, I was about to fall asleep and I got the first four lines and jumped outta bed to write them down and ended up just writing the rest there aswell. Im not even sure I know what it's about, i think I just like some of the wording.

I will probably revisit it tonight and fix it up, but who knows. there are some very weak parts.

Thanks for your input.