Head down low

I don't think these are very good, but songs are few and far between, and I don't want the songwriting section to get lonely. :)

By the way, I don't think "Head down low" is a very good song title. If you get any ideas from reading it, lemme know.

caught all alone and needing
something to blur the line
something to make it all less bleak
let loose the things that hurt you
dark circles fade in time
cut off the phone before it speaks

just dying to impress you
it’s louder in the dark
expecting nothing more or less
seeing the things around you
for what they really are
still incomplete at just a glance

you can’t tear yourself away
you can’t turn it down at all
you can’t hide yourself today
‘cause you know where you are

just keep your head down low

I caught you floating aimless
just passing by, subdued
peeling cracked paint on bathroom walls
I caught you on your way out
I rang the bell for you
but one last fling won’t hurt at all

you can’t tear yourself away
you can’t turn it down at all
you can’t hide yourself today
‘cause you know where you are

just keep your head down low

Right on man. I like this one...

Not really sure what it's about or what you meant... but to me it seems like a song about an ended relationship... pretty general, I know. But, that's what i get from it.

Even in all it's ambiguity the lyrics are still pretty cool.

Originally Posted by: aschlemanRight on man. I like this one...

Not really sure what it's about or what you meant... but to me it seems like a song about an ended relationship... pretty general, I know. But, that's what i get from it.

Even in all it's ambiguity the lyrics are still pretty cool.

Thanks, man. Glad you like it. That's actually not at all what I wrote it about, but it's always really neat when people read your lyrics and get something totally different out of it.

I'm actually liking these more myself the more I read them. At first they seemed kinda bland and cliche (which I guess they still are), but I think I did alright anyway.

Groovy. I'm going to play like you do.

caught all alone and needing
something to blur the line
something to make it all less bleak
let loose the things that hurt you
dark circles fade in time
cut off the phone before it speaks

just dying to impress you
it’s louder in the dark
expecting nothing more or less
seeing the things around you
for what they really are
still incomplete at just a glance

you can’t tear yourself away
you can’t turn it down at all
you can’t hide yourself today
‘cause you know where you are

just keep your head down low

I caught you floating aimless
just passing by, subdued
peeling cracked paint on bathroom walls
I caught you on your way out
I rang the bell for you
but one last fling won’t hurt at all

you can’t tear yourself away
you can’t turn it down at all
you can’t hide yourself today
‘cause you know where you are

just keep your head down low

It's neat how most of the lines you liked were spare lines I took from incompleted songs or poems. The rest of the song I just wrote around those lines.