Anhedonia

i stare into the broken air
liquid leaking from a jar
aging wires thread through wounds
but i'm in love

the opera, the deafening news,
decorated hippies at the local lagoon
disappearing arid numbers
but i'm in love

my flower blooms, again
flower blooms

found myself, i'll have my show
it snowed today, just let it go
for i shed no tears and i have no fears
for i'm adamant

how can this be so beautiful?
the colours, the sound,
the quotes, the dreams all so
brand new...

my flower blooms again,
flower blooms again

somehow i only like the first verse...i sorta have a little tune going on guitar...tell me what u guys think...thanks

I kind of agree... the first verse is very good. I liked it alot. Work on that second verse a little and you should have a nice little tune though!!! I liked the imagry in the first verse... it just kind of dissappeared in the second... kind of like it was forced...

It sounds a tad forced to me because of lines like

"for i shed no tears and i have no fears"
and
"how can this be so beautiful?"

They just seem quite stock compared to your stellar first verse.

yea those line you mentioned gives me the creeps all of a sudden...needs alot of work...thanks for the input!