Originally Posted by: acapellaTo be frank, I'm surprised you all liked this story so much. It seems to me like Brendon got an idea for a story, some good lines, realized he had no actual plot, and made it as quick as possible. It just seems lazy to me. I didn't know that laziness was a style, not to mention a particularly tricky one.

Jolly's right. It rare that a first draft ever survives through to final edit. But it's a solid idea, it's written well in the minimalistic style and has potential . I look forward to seeing it as it develops. Remember too that minimalism is one of the most difficult styles to master. It's much easier to use a bunch of words rather than to pare down to the bare bones.