My good friend Jack...

A song about whiskey..... I think you can pick up the metaphor...


Orange sky, rear view mirror
East coast is getting nearer
My friend Jack by my side
Miss East coast is out of sight
Stars move in on my position
Jack tilts back and answers all my questions
Jacks a little heavy now but getting lighter
He's bitter but atleast he's not a liar

Eastbound in a left hand lane
Put your seat back Jack forget my name
Let me tell you a little secret
Jacks a buddy bought by the bottle but
He's the best friend I've ever met
Eastbound with whiskey breath
Jack is good, no, he's the best.
He says I drink too much
But I can't stop yet...
Eastbound with whiskey breath

Black night, angry moon
East coast can't come too soon
Me and Jack, one sweet ride
Miss East coast will be my bride
Red skies color my situation
Jack sits up with an empty expression
Jacks a little lighter now but stills weighs heavy
I took his life to erase a memory

Eastbound in a left hand lane
Put your seat back Jack forget my name
Let me tell you a little secret
Jacks a buddy bought by the bottle but
He's the best friend I've ever met
Eastbound with whiskey breath
Jack is good, no, he's the best.
He says I drink too much
But I can't stop yet...
Eastbound with whiskey breath
Thanks Jack for the ride
Tonight Miss East Coast will be my bride.

Wow, aschleman. I really really liked this. Of all the songs of yours I've seen (pronounced: 'remembered'), I like this one the best.

My favourite lines:

He's bitter but at least he's not a liar

Me and Jack, one sweet ride
Miss East coast will be my bride

Eastbound in a left hand lane
Put your seat back Jack forget my name

Typically I would find a song about booze kinda hokey, but you pulled it off very nicely. High-five.

I like Jack! songs cool too dude :)

This gets my seal of approval.

Pretty nice, hope you can post some audio to it... and of course...Jack is the man... nothing like it.

Very Tom Waits; in the best posible way.

Thanks for the comments all!! I've been hammering it out with a fast paced blues beat with a lot of pauses and solo breaks. It's one of those songs that I can see as a continual work in progress for a long time to come since the way I'm writing it has a lot of little bits and pieces... I'll try to get a basic acoustic version recorded and posted.

*cheers* By far the best song I've seen that you've written.

No doubt ..... cool song.

I liked the first verse a lot, but I think you broke the metaphor too soon. It seems like perhaps you should do it in the last verse or not at all.

I guess you don;t really break the metaphor, well you do, but then you go back into it. I just think it would be more interesting if it was subtle the whole way through. If you keep up the illusion of Jack being a human companion on a trip it is less trite and clichéd. Thats why the verses work so well.

The second verse is real good to. Like I said it is much more interesting when it's not obvious, better imagery and all. The refrain just needs a little tweaking.

I agree with Drew. Great song. However, perhaps you could let the listener figure that one out on there own, not that its a hard metaphor to figure out...thats like using "Mary Jane" in there. I could use for example, AC/DC's "The Jack". Songs about venereal disease. But Bon never uses those words. I'd consider taking an approach along those lines.

But who am I to give advice? I couldn't write lyrics if my life depended on it.

Yeah... I see what you guys are saying and I thought about the same thing... I just didn't want to push the limits of audience comprehenstion... I've found that in order to take away from blowing the cover of jack so soon... i just take out the line "Jacks a buddy bought by the bottle" And I slip it into the last refrainm somewhere.... keeps the imagery without blatantly blowing the cover of the metaphor.... I also didn't want to hide the metaphor too deep in the imagery mostly because that's not my style... and secondly because I wrote the song in the stylings of a blues song so It's more or less suppose to be straight forard and in your face....

Thanks for the opinions though guys!! Means a lot that you guys take the time to read my stuff.