I like "light brown eyes" never heard that in a song before. I mean what you need to do it get a little more clever and/or deep. Everything else you wrote was a little cliche. Just put a little bit more of the situation in there, specifics.
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You can rhyme in songs... thats not a trick all the time. Meaning=don't rhyme in EVERY song EVERY time, but its alright.
I like "light brown eyes" never heard that in a song before. I mean what you need to do it get a little more clever and/or deep. Everything else you wrote was a little cliche. Just put a little bit more of the situation in there, specifics.
I like "light brown eyes" never heard that in a song before. I mean what you need to do it get a little more clever and/or deep. Everything else you wrote was a little cliche. Just put a little bit more of the situation in there, specifics.