I don't like it; I'll tell you why, though. It seems to me that 99% of songwriters write mostly about love, and love loss, and the whole topic of love. Love is the most over-used and abused topic to write songs about, and i simply don't see the major creative spark in the lyrics. Nothing sparks out and says "hm, nice lyric".

Certain lyrics jump out at you, like this one:

"If you choose not to decide
you still have made a choice"

or

"Everything you gather
is just more that you can lose"

See what I mean?

Now, that being said, if you change it a little bit, put some clever lines in there, it could be pretty decent. Work on the lyrics, I've seen alot worse than those.

~Incidents

[Edited by Incidents Happen on 08-27-2003 at 12:29 AM]