That editing process is where songs come to life. I love that process. I have spent years working on songs that I "finished" a long time ago. The process is powerful, and I can't immagine any finished product without it. You repeat the song until it really speaks for you. Some songs never stop growing.
I like your chord structrue and lyrics and I am sure I will like it more in a few months. Keep up the writting. The more you write, the more you litteraly make the music your own.
Clearly you are on the right path.
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