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jcashfanaus
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jcashfanaus
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05/23/2010 5:56 am
Hi, I'm new to songwriting and I wanted to write a song about a true story, about my father. I put the lyrics together and now I find myself struggling to get it rolling off the tongue and putting chords to it. The C and Am (I can only play very simple chords) seem to work but I'm having trouble about where I put them.

Here's my song lyric in case anyone's interested in commenting:


Forgotten Soldier
=============


C Am
Conscripted before he could vote
C Am
He was sent abroad in a boat
C Am
To save once enemies from the Soviets
C Am
The dire thoughts he had were copious



Forgotten soldier

With a black patch and red circle

Upon the side of his shoulder

Nobody would look him in the eye

He asked the colonel who said

They're looking at a man who's going to die



Quick march

By your left

By your left

Left right left

Left right left



Forgotten Soldier

With a black patch and red circle

Upon the side of his shoulder



He was demobbed in Berlin

Where his thoughts were dim

He marched, he walked, he crawled

To the Hook of Holland

Back to his young wife and son

Returning to Britain the man he once was

Others were in pieces, he was one



Forgotten Soldier

With a black patch and red circle

Upon the side of his shoulder

[END]


Thanks to anyone who replies. By the way I thought I'd mention I can't get Johnny Cash off my mind and I am trying to emulate his style with rhythm, since it will probably be years of practise since I can do the boom-chick and play the other chords he could.

PS. The C and Am chords are not in their proper positions here, but I thought I'd just leave it that way.