the blues


g-dude
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Joined: 09/01/09
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g-dude
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09/01/2009 5:49 pm
VERSE 1

I wake up in the morning

When the sun is donning

Jest wish I could stay in bed

Under the cosy blankets

Not put on my jackets

Jest stay home instead

CHORUS

I wanna pick up my guitar

Write a new a new bar

Jest wanna play the blues

I wanna play my song

All day long

Wat av I got to lose

VERSE 2

I watch television

Rather go on a mission

I’ve seen it all before

Fed up of TV

Jest think ill drink my tea

Or walk along the shore

CHORUS

I wanna pick up my guitar

Write a new a new bar

Jest wanna play the blues

I wanna play my song

All day long

Wat av I got to lose


please tell me wht u think of my song and any improvments i can make
i also need help to think of a third verse so post ideas
thanx
g-dude x
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tmac4919
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tmac4919
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Posts: 19
09/11/2009 1:40 pm
Not bad at all. Since this is a blues song, you need to include alcohol and women.

Fed up of being alone
Jest think ill drink my whiskey
And walk along, to find my baby.

;)
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