Originally Posted by: BrokenJerathanks for all the help but i have a question or two.
the first lead break, does it work as a chours since im using the chours riffs as a backing?
the bridge i put in there, if it doesnt fit into the song should i go from the second chours right back into the verse or should i add another lead break inbetween?

for the outro chours is it musically ok to change the wording of the chours?

It doesn't matter. Listen and if if sounds too much the same for a long period of time, break it up. I would go from the bridge to the chorus since the bridge is actually another verse. I would put in only one solo, and one chorus repeated several times, but you might add a riff between verses, but don't get carried away. A solo at the end with a fade out or maybe something that lingers on at the end. You know, let it ring! Something that is interesting is to play without your right hand and work with just some hammering and pull offs. Just a thought.

These are just suggestions. Play around with it and do what is comfortable and pleasing to the ear. Don't try to play super fast or do some strange things. Your listeners are only interested in what sounds good. There are a lot of factors in producing a good song. I am more lyricist than a musician. I'm sure others can really help you with the music. When you are satisfied, post it and the criticism will really start.

I know you can do it. Good luck!