There was a time that i was doubtfull about my writing skills, but then i realized if its good for you, its good.
One point i would say, is that i would change the title (but hey, like I said; if this is what you want to express, if its right for you, that that is the way the song is going to be).
I just say this about the title, because you seem to use the word 'something' a lot in the lyrics already.
Naming a song to a word thats not in the lyrics, can give a deeper meaning to a song. Like you only give away part of the puzzle, like there's an other background to it that people cant see.
Keep up the good work!
You have to remember, the more you write songs, compose,... the better at it you are going to become.