I just want to thank you. You did a brilliant job of explaining you compostion. I now understand what you were trying to do. I don't particularly like the style, but I respect your right to write the way you wish.
I personally (just my opinion) don't understand why anyone who goes to the trouble writing a song and does not want to be, as you said "the next Bob Dylan, or Paul McCartney". Well, maybe not Bob Dylan. Actually, Dylan is a great lyricists, but does anyone real think he can sing? Never mind.
To me (again just my opinion) that is the best thing that could ever happen to a songwriter. To think that so many people enjoyed his songs enough to pay for them.
There is nothing wrong in breaking the rules to accomplish a shock, feeling, or to make a point. Words can be softly spokened and not sung. They can be screamed or sung with a crack in the voice to simulate saddness.
I went back to your orginal posting and carefully read and studied each line and I must say in all honesty, I just don't get it! But, hey! I don't have to.
If this is what you want to do, it's fine with me. And even if you don't want be a big super star and make millions, I'm still going pray you will make it.
Don't pay too much mind to my criticism. A few at this site are extremely thin skinned and I may come on a bit strong. Ok, I may come on extremely strong at times, but I am only trying to help. What I say usually has merit, after all I have been at this a long time. It is not my intention to hurt anyone, I just have to tell it as I see it and if anybody can't stand a little constructive criticism no matter how it is presented, then they shouldn't ask my opinion by posting it.
This has nothing to do with you. You have taken everything I have said very well. And I understand your side of it now and you can use what I said or ignore it. It's just my opinion.
I am going to try to be a little more understanding and a bit easier on people, but I seriously doubt if I will make everybody happy. I probably won't make anyone happy!
It's been a pleasure. Good luck with your writing and just remember, whatever you do, do it the best you can! :)
