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dvenetian
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dvenetian
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11/14/2007 2:08 pm
Writing Lyrics is just part of the Songwriting experience. They don't have to be "Happy" and positive, "Sad" and depressive, or make sense by having a storyline with meaning behind them. They don't need a rhyme scheme or to follow a certain template . They just need to make a statement, becoming complementary through adjustments with the other ingredients to have an impact. In the following Lyrics, some of the so-called "rules" were ignored;

:I see your sister in her
Sunday dress
She's out to please
she pouts her best
She's out to take
no need to try
She's ready to make

Chorus;
It's so easy
when everybody's tryin to please me

:Cars are crashin every night
I drink and drive
everythings in sight
I make the fire
but I miss the firefight
I hit the bull's eye every night

Chorus;
Repeat........

:So easy
but nothin seems to please me
it all fits so right
when I fade into the night
see me hit you
you fall down

I see you standing there
you think you're so cool
why don't you just
F--- Off................

Etc, etc, etc..........................................

Just reading these lyrics can sound as some sporadic rhyme scheme is used, while other parts in the section(s) "fall off", or lack a sense of purpose.
But, putting the right progression to balance out the lyrics, this could become a great Song.
It's difficult to predict the outcome of an Artist's work without hearing the complete expression behind it.