I think it has potential.. you really need to re-master it or re-do the mix though.. it's horrible in that regard. The kick drum just sounds "wrong".. later on there's some heavily distorted guitar in the higher frequencies that completely drones out the melodic solo part in the "background".. The solo should be where the singer would normally be mixed in.. or just behind the singer if there is a singer... the melody is nice.. but can't be heard for the wash of distorted guitar there.

As I said.. it has potential.. the composition/writing itself is great.. just the recording/mastering needs a lot of work.