Overall I didn't care for the song. Some of the problem maybe that the volume is too low and not clear for this old man to hear. I turned the volume up as loud as I could without distorting it and I couldn't hear it very well.
I didn't care for the lyrics, but that's me. I like more up lifting stuff and I found this to be too depressing. I do believe you can write lyrics well, I just like more joyful stuff.
Your singing was off key a lot, but I did like your voice. I just think you need to do more singing. Sort of learn what you can and can't not do as you go.
The chord progression, well there wasn't much to it. Kind of boring.
Your lead in was too long to keep interest. I did like the guitar solo, but it would have sounded much better with more of a tempo.
Sorry, but I am writing this as constructive criticism. Please keep on writing and performing. I think you can do much better.
And remember, very body enjoys different things. If they didn't, we would all be playing the same song over and over and over .....
