You certainly have the rhyme going in the lyrics. I don't care for all the doom and gloom stuff. It would be interesting to hear the music.

Are you a musician and lyric writer?

I'm sure there is an audience for this, but it's not my cup of tea.

Thanks for posting it and keep it up. Whatever you do, don't become discouraged by any of my comments. You know how it is. Everyone has there own style, niche, etc. Just because one does care for it, does mean it nobody will.

Keep writing.