Hi James, good to see you posting again. I'm listening to Twilight II...
Either the clean guitar was recorded with some very small timing slips OR it was recorded with delay on - whichever it was the delay magnifies it a bit. If you recorded with the delay live the problem could be that the delay isn't sinchronised to the bpm of the song. A VST delay is the best cure for that. Only a mild criticism, nice flowing idea and theme. You taking this one to a full song? Right where it ends I was expecting an explosion of fast heavy guitars to jump in, interested to see where you take this one.