silver shrapnel


jamen
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jamen
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06/15/2007 2:12 pm
hi schmange

id like to hear what you think of this song. your opinion is appreciated thanks

Silver shrapnel


Certain allegations cast aspersions on their nature
Intrusive interrogation fails to come up with the answers
Fooling everybody into thinking they were forward thinkers,
Clearing up the bloodshed with the words that don’t mean nothing
Appearing apologetic were the bastards up to something
Conning everybody with the tongue that’s laced with silver shrapnel

Pleading with the natives to remember how they suffered
Giving ultimatums when they don’t comply to orders
Threatening everybody with the wand that leads to disappearing,
Fighting for their freedom they were fighting for their futures
The natives some extremists dug in deep to keep their cover
Calling everybody to prepare for long term provocation,

Their legacy is built on treachery
Visionary very ordinary
Peace to pacify, making wars to justify
Demeaning life
Grabbing headlines
They want the keys to lands, open up and seize command
Help themselves to contraband, I e resources
Put themselves on pedestals faking charm and breaking wills
Covering up illegal deals

Calling in the favours when the flavours taste so nasty
Cooking up a storming finish turning up the anti
Feeding everybody with the food that’s stale from jargons larder,
Fearing indigestion from the gluttony of their stuffing
Spewing out their propaganda huffing and a puffing
Leading everybody up a road that’s mined with mortar danger,

Their legacy is built on treachery
Visionary very ordinary
Peace to pacify, making wars to justify
Demeaning life
Grabbing headlines,
They want the keys to lands, open up and seize command
Help themselves to contraband, I e resources
Put themselves on pedestals faking charm and breaking wills
Covering up illegal deals
It’s happening now, right in front of the whole world’s eyes corruption of the highest kind
Moonlighting in another gang called the high and the mighty
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earthman buck
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earthman buck
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06/15/2007 2:48 pm
You've got a real knack for rhyme and rhythm. That aspect of your songwriting reminds me a bit of Amanda Palmer.

Keep posting, you're keeping me entertained. :)
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jamen
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jamen
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06/15/2007 3:16 pm
hi earthman buck
thanks for the feedback its appreciated on both counts. i dont know who amanda palmer is but im sure its a compliment.
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earthman buck
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earthman buck
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06/15/2007 6:10 pm
Amanda Palmer is the singer/songwriter/pianist for the Dresden Dolls. She's my favourite songwriter.
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