It's got some rhythm to it and would probably fit in well with an aggressive thrash metal song. It reminds me of "Angel of Death" for obvious reasons, but you have a different angle on it and a different lyrical style, which is great. But personally, I'd get rid of the "Hellocaust" lyric and thus rename the song - as Grizzly said, the Holocaust is an extremely touchy subject, and a play on the word, even a serious one, could very well be seen as disrespectful and offensive. Also, the sentence that Eric drew attention to is a bit ambiguous.

But good work on the whole. Keep writing, mate :)