Originally Posted by: earthman buckThis is my favourite story of yours, by far. The character is easier to relate to than in your other stories, and the story itself is pretty universal. Excellent job, I am really looking forward to see what comes next.

One question: I didn't understand the line "their hearts rent in two," in the second-last paragraph. What does that mean? Does 'rent' have some alternate meaning I'm unaware of?

Yeah, the past tense of "to rend" meaning to tear or rip.

Yeah, I like this one as well. I'm also paring down the first one, with Thomas, and adding some minimalist sentences to help give the reader more of a story to follow. As it is now, it reads like a fairly intelligent, clearly Joycean writer in love with his own lyricism; I'd rather it read like a story with some breathtaking lines (if I can aspire to something so lofty). Thanks, Brendon!