Originally Posted by: grizzlymintYeah, it doesn't flow well at all. Hahahahahah, funny I'm the one who wrote it and think that also. But I've got some ideas in my head how I could make it work with music.

Yeah... it's kind of choppy. But I think it adds to the disruptive nature of the whole thing. Artistically I think it works well and with music all you'll need to do is break some of the long lines up with some pauses and it should turn out just fine! Good work, and amen!