Not the style of music I usually listen too but the playing is good. As far as constructive criticism goes it's mainly on the mix (my biggest problem too). The guitars need to low end and a mid boost as do the drums - they sound a little tinny at the moment. Nothing that can't be fixed. I don't mind the song structure at all, I don't really like following the usual template myself, just do whatever you like. Honest;y, this track could be lifted big time with a bit pf patient mixing. I would ease back a little on the phaser, keep it but reduce the level of wet to dry mix. Post back if you change tweak the mix, I'd love to hear the difference.