Originally Posted by: Stephen Lanford
hang on, falling on every day
falling on every blade, why don't I cry
so this is my last goodbye
i cant stand by ur side
with all these crazy goodbyes....

I didn't really like this at all. You went from no images to forcing images into the song where they don't fit. "Why don't I cry" really stands out as an ill-fitting and unprofessional line. The last line also doesn't work, it just drags the verse (?) out in a boring and emotionless way. Maybe if the last line ended with something other than "crazy goodbyes" it would work better. Pretty much my problems with it are that "cry" ends the second line, "crazy" is not an interesting or imaginative adjective, and the word "goodbye" is used too many times to end lines.