I think your guitar may be a little out of tune and it could definately be perfected a little more rhythmically and developed melodically.
With that said though, I agree with the other poster that this Raw feel has a sense of true musicality to it. I don't know if you sing much, but you have a good voice; however I believe you shouldn't restrain yourself as much and project it.
Keep on learning and playing. Peace.
-Kole (Kyle Hicks)
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Composer, Guitarist, Instructor.