Originally Posted by: iiholly
gutter babies take heroine
overdose at ten
I liked it all except for that line. Actually it depends how I look at it, because if the "ten" refers to age ten, I don't like it, because that just seems weak. If it refers to ten o' clock, then I like it, it makes it seem like overdose is a routine thing to the writer (or person being written about). I would like to hear it with music because I have a hard time imagining how it would sound, it's good though. Well done.
You go outside and practice screaming. We'll play music while you're gone.