Originally Posted by: jiujitsu_jesusI kinda like it, it's got a bit of a Syd Barrett feeling to it :cool:. As long as the music is distinctive and interesting, it ought to be a good song. However, I would replace the line, "then you grinded him and threw him in a bog" with something a bit more distinctive... but keep working on it! :)

thanx man i just replaced it idk if its better i had to rewrite that line before but thanx youre inspirational :) i like pink floyd