[U]Spiral Down[/U]
Verse 1:
I can only do what
I can do to make it
Look like I'm doing
All I can for you
When the dust is settled and gone
And when it all is said an done
Chorus:
You go away again, you go away and you leave me
You go away again, you come back, will you free me?
You gone away again, you go away and you relieve me
You go away again, are you comin' back, will you release me?
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I like the spacing you used (I'm looking at it as poetry, since I can't hear the melody) in that part of the first verse of spiral down. This makes a cliche statement seem more interesting, but it's not cliche enough to bother me too bad.
The last line of spiraling down I like. The combining of those two commonly used phrases is interesting, but I'm not sure if they have been used together before. It looks familiar, but oh well.
The chorus in eye candy is toooooo repetitive. I haven't heard it, but maybe you make the chorus so simple because it's musically complex. If that's not the case you might want to consider changing it up a bit.