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aschleman
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aschleman
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03/24/2006 7:35 pm
I just had a couple lines of this pop into my head. So, I'm going to write it down on here so I can come back and look at it later. AND while it's on here anyone who wishes to critique it or give me and idea about what kind of song it sounds like (acoustic, rock, metal... etc) can do so! This is going to be somewhat of a freestyle as I've only jotted down a few lines. Kind of depressing but the inspiration is the fact that I feel like I'm never going to be free of college, or the debt that is associated with college....

We have yet to reach the surface of what we can be
I'm still sinking in the lies they're telling you and me
But the life I have is holding on like it won't let go
Tell me something I can't tell you, something I don't know
Are we all just sinking slowly?
Falling straight into the hole they're digging
What piece of mind are you sparing
I think the hearts of men like me shouldn't be made to bleed
But the blood from me is still spilling
I think even though it's not me
Atleast a part of me is escaping
Atleast my blood is free to flow
Maybe the life of me just wants to let go.
Hang on to the breath you're breathing
All this is surely soon ending
Atleast we still have one thing to look forward to
When it's finally over and these scars show through

eh... needs work...