Originally Posted by: lifeis@songand with your eyes you shattered a city
the thought of your lips? apocalyptic to me

First thing I notice about this song. First line is pretty cool phrasing, however, as Robert Frost would tell you, it's best to change the first linein order to accomodate the second, because it seems more natural. That second line seems a bit forced, maybe put the city line second and an edited version of the second before it.