Originally Posted by: lifeis@songha ha i went back and listened to the beatle song "girl" and they really do say "tit tit tit" haha any way here are some words if anybody wants to critique them:


and with your eyes you shattered a city
the thought of your lips? apocalyptic to me
wanted to know every thing you are
you are the black hole that eats all the stars

any recolection of a memory
is blackened by the tar from your cigarette
you disapeared from my mind like smoke escaping your virgin lungs
in a kiss

it came back around and plaugued my blood stream
red lips, red lips,now im an addict
you clouded my perception of trust
and so real is the definition of lust
it hit me like a crashing car
your the black hole that eats all the stars

well, if ive got no ambition
none to live out these inscriptions
i think its fair to say that youve given me just enough
to not give a ****.....

(C)2004macias

Well done bud. Let's hear it on the listening post.