Originally Posted by: 6strngs_2hmbkrswell, I know that, I was just saying that you could have said something positive in addition to something negative, and then it just doesn't sound as cold-hearted and mean. for example, I said something negative and something positive.

I'm positive I didn't like it? :p
..kidding...
Ok, I listened to it again. There's some interesting ideas but it needs a lot of work. More interesting drum patterns to break up the monotony. Maybe bring the drums in on the off beat just for the suprise. Speed it up so that the guitar playing sounds more impressive and cut each of the 4 bars down to 2 so there are more changes happening more often. Then if you're making it into a complete song it'll need backup instruments, maybe some keys, bass and vocals.