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iamthe_eggman
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iamthe_eggman
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12/05/2005 4:57 pm
Not the worst I've ever read. However, knife metaphors in breakup poetry is very clichéd. Also, your meter is inconsistent throughout. To understand what I mean by that, try reading the poem aloud at a steady pace (that is, not clipping endings or prounouncing two syllable words as one syllable).
... and that's all I have to say about that.

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