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6strngs_2hmbkrs
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6strngs_2hmbkrs
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Joined: 08/14/04
Posts: 3,837
12/05/2005 7:41 am
I've tried something different, instead of just writing a song, and being straight to the point with my lyrics, I've written a poem, and I tried using some poem writing techniques I learned in english a couple years back... of course, I was never good with poetry, so let me know how I did, let's see if you can guess what it's about, here it is:

tis biting me with jaws of steel
tis gnawing at my inner being, how I feel
tis cutting me, blood slowly drips
tis calling me, just failing screaming fits

jagged blade so deep
shadows from your eyes
untied from the ones we keep
bringing my demise

pierced through the heart
twas strong on my part
words with lethal capacity
your satisfactory catastrophe

come sunlight onto my bed
bring for I, intrepid
let me set with you
move on, the day is through
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