Originally Posted by: magicninjaNot bad. Try changing around the words in the chorus so it isn't repeating so much. Even one word can make a difference. Like with the emotion of being angry about this life try I'm sorry about this life. Maybe with the MPH increase from 80 as the song goes along you know go from 80 to 90 to100.

Stuff like that but a pretty good start.

the 80 in the 45 was there because eighty rhymes with angry (sort of... enough for this song anyway)

and saying you're sorry about this life.. it changes the whole mood of the song, it's supposed to be the boy fed up with all of this and just running away.

for the record, he's driving 80 in the 45 because he wants to get away as fast as possible

re-reading it now, it sounds kinda dull when just reading it, but when singing it with the melody I meant for the song it sounds much better. of course, you probably won't ever hear that melody because I'm a terrible singer and wouldn't even attempt to make a recording of that "with me singing at least"