post your songs here and we can see how we improve it

Peace be unto you.

I have a very hard time writing songs, but I wouldn't say that I am completely anti-creative. Most of my music always ends up being "progressive" to some extent, though not in lines with bands like Yes, Gentle Giant, or Dream Theater.

I have some songs on my Myspace page, and I feel that 3 out of the 4 on there could be a lot better. One of the songs is all electronic loops, so it's none of my own musical ability.

Matt's Music

The songs that I am having problems with are Before the end of summer, Progress, and The Lightest Hour.

I would appreciate any advice. Thank you.

Peace.

~ Matt

I got good acoustic song. Wrote it when I firsted started to write so sort of sucky.

Standard tuning

Looking For:
Don't tell me the truth
That you were the one
That killed me with that gun
You never said it was done
But before I go to the other side of life
I want everyone to notice you

Their looking for you now
They never saw you before

That goverment job realy did pay off
But in the end of it all
You will be prosecuted by the goverment


I am looking forward to your feedback please I realy want to finish it.

this is my poem...

Nobody Left
Ian / Nov. 2, 2005


Everything is flashing back to my brain.
I’m scared and my bodies start to drain.
The comets in the sky falls like rain.
Just like me as the crushing airplane

Lights are gone out and losing my sight!!!
Now I’m alone, I’m down I must continue the fight?
Contradictions is everywhere I can’t see the light
The Black is separated from White.

I hate to see your face smiling at me…
I still murder you in my dreams
Can’t you feel it? Look into my eyes…
Save your breath, I will send you in your grave

My blood is boiling like a magma underground
You’ll feel it up to the last drop of your blood
This is not a perfect world for you and for me
My Evil minds attacks your virgin souls

This is the last time you’ll know
You’re dead and not breathing
Your heart and lungs stops pumping
Nobody left! Just a decomposed body