another song, opinion plz


Ksocr39
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Ksocr39
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07/31/2005 11:21 am
like it??? i wrote this pretty fast so there's prob tons of spellin mistakes, but u get the picture, just let me kno wut u think



tryin to keep covered

why can't you see
i want the covers over me
the lights turned down dark
just sittin alone

i can't explain
the thoughts runnin through my mind
scrambled they seem
all coudy and cold

(chorus)
there are things i don't want to know
there are things that i can't show
and you have to understand
that i am alone

desperatly breathin
continuously thinkin
that i'm rapped in my covers
with the lights down dark

why can't you see
i'm imagining stories
closed in my room
just sittin alone

i can't explain
the things i picture in my mind
scrambled they seem
all cloudy and cold

CHORUS

desperatly breathin
continuously thinkin
that i'm in my fantasy
with my door closed shut

its cloudy and cold
gettin thicker with light
when the rain starts to fall
right through my door

when my thoughts are spillin forward
and pictures not puzzled
my covers are threading away
just sittin alone

desperatly breathin
continuously thinkin
everything has broken
like my shattered door

just sittin alone
[FONT=Verdana]coolest person ever![/FONT] :eek:
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hebrewhammer913
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hebrewhammer913
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07/31/2005 3:50 pm
it sounds very maroon5-esque but i like it very much :D
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