Good points Jolly...

I agree mostly with him about your song. The "me's" kind of pushed it in a different direction than I believe you wanted to go. Take the changes that Jolly made and try to polish it up a little bit. With its simplistic approach it does very much seem like a good Sunday school song... but if you take the overall message and try to find more wittier ways of saying it... It could be a great christian rock song.